10/5/2011: Doc Stovepipe’s Medicine Show: Mississippi Li (part one) <——-READ FIRST before reading below
Prompts for this week of the Rule of Three Writers Challenge Blogfest:
- Someone is killed or almost killed.
- One of the characters is revealed to be not who he or she is.
- A relationship becomes complicated.
- A character lies to another on an important matter.
Word Count: 593
“A Woman Gets Tired of the Same Man All the Time“: Doc Stovepipe (part two)
Doc watched Lil and the farm boy go at it. The magics sparked off of Doc Stovepipe’s clenched fists. “Damn her!” he scowled deep inside. “Damn this Renaissance!” he said out loud, but, not too loud. He fought the urge to lash out. Now was not the time. “Soon. Very soon.”
Life on the road was getting harder. Breathable air was getting worse; domes were going up; the major roadways were closing down. Traveling in a steam powered Medicine Show was not going to last much longer. There was a chance for him to retire well off. He had a plan, but Lil was supposed to “entice” the patsy, not screw him. “Did she know? She aint stupid. Hell, I should have killed her already.”
Doc made his way into Renaissance proper. He passed by The Barking Cat and Heriot’s Pass saloons. They were both too busy, too noisy. His show drew a large crown, and he had bilked enough suckers out of the entertainment and “Magical Elixir”, and now most of that crowd was in the bars, trying out his wares.
He closed his eyes and concentrated. “HERE!” came that soft tickling throughout his head. “Here.” Doc followed the mental invite and wound up at of The Last Stinkin’ Battalion. A rat hole of rat holes. A quiet hole, and just what the doctor ordered.
He laughed at his own stupid joke as he entered, drawing the attention of the bartender. She drew Doc’s attention, and took away his breath at the same time. Long, curly red hair, green eyes, and pale smooth skin.
“You going to gawk or you going to order?” she said, folding her arms across her chest.
“Beer, whatever you have that you’ll drink yourself.”
She poured him a dark brew with a heavy head. “Renascence Brown,” she answered to his raised eyebrow question.
“Stop drooling and turn around; I’m sitting by the staircase,” came the mental tickling, much clearer this time. Doc did as told, grabbed his beer, turned, walked over, and sat down. He locked eyes with another redhead, but this one was not jaw dropping sexy. A scraggy bearded, scared and craggy mien faced him. “Doc,” Digger said out loud, tipping his head.
Doc asked, “How did you contact me ‘that’ way? The magics were forbidden out here. I thought ‘long sending’ was a lost practice.”
“Obviously, it’s not lost. Just few can hear it now. You can. That’s why I called out.”
Doc was meeting fewer and fewer of those with the knacks. “You sent me the info. We set up camp near the Gauche. I dowsed the deposits the idiots here missed in the mines. Lil is getting the male sacrifice right now.”
Digger just stared at Doc. “As one of those idiots, I might take exception to that remark. I’ll let it pass, as I know reaching out to you was the right thing to do.” Digger closed his eyes, then opened them abruptly. “Drink up. They’re almost here.”
They weren’t long in waiting. The door opened. Mississippi Lil held onto Gid, arms entwined. Gid was stealing glances at her, smiling. Lil saw Doc and dragged Gid over.
“Here’s the love of my life,” Doc said out loud, leaning over to kiss Lil on the cheek.
“Liar,” thought back Digger, smiling.
*****
Gid looked at both men, and did not like the way they felt. They both had power. Something was very wrong here.
I have to agree with Gid–there’s something sinister about these characters.
I loved reading this! Can’t wait for part three.
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Ditto above, great sinister aura. And “The Barking Cat”… wish there was a pub going by that name.
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Andy: The Barking Cat is from someone’s Renaissance post (LOVED that name). The four of us are collecting names of places created by the various authors to expand the “atlas” of Renaissance.
Glad you enjoyed the sinister vibe too. This is fun.
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Oh..and I forgot: the Renaissance Dark was from that same story. I will have to check my notes.
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Thank you GE. I really wasn’t sure where to take this at first…honest.
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Your characters have secrets. I wish to read more to find out what they are. Very intriguing.
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Well, that has been one of the things all along: everyone has a secret.
Thanks MP
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Nice! Only one thing: Look out for the sudden perspective change at the end. 🙂 Can’t wait to see what happens to Gid.
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Hi Misha: I did the same with the last one, setting up where things were going to go in the next post. I did it on purpose. I edited in a small line of asterisks…hope that helps people get around it.
Thanks
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It does answer the question of whether you’re going with Gil or Digger.
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Great opposition of forces here with Lil and the Doc/Digger.
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Thanks Kurt. and yes… Gid’s story next. Digger is just one of the side characters.
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Goodness this just keeps getting better and better! I honestly can’t pick a favorite anymore. I like them all! I find your characters and the setting very real. Nice one! 🙂
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Thanks David. I appreciate it.
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I really like who this story unfolds. I’m curious to find out how this continues … but I also can’t wait for the next prompts, now that I’ve managed to shape the current ones into my second chapter.
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Like last time, I’m not looking at the prompts until I post them on Friday, so…in the same place with you. Thanks Nicole.
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We actually have “The Barking Lamb” in my hometown :-)) Nice, incorporating other posts. Good detail about dowsing for undiscovered loot.
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I hope to pick up a few other things from other of the stories for the last two stories. Can’t believe it’s half done now. Wow.
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Very interesting! I wonder what’s going to happen to Dig?
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Kathleen, Dig is not the one to worry about.
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I liked the set up/hint for next week’s MC. It gives just a tease of what will be coming. I just love the Doc Stovepipe’s Medicine Show theme! Your characters are so well written…I feel like I’m right there. I have to say, though, I was a bit stunned when I read ‘sacrifice’! Whoa there Nelly…what’s going on?? Ha.
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Seems the word sacrifice hit a lot of people. Good. Keep everyone guessing.
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Male sacrifice? Uh oh…
I like how you’ve finished the last two episodes with an absrupt PoV switch to next week’s featured character. Poor Gid, what will he do?
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Gid…well, don’t “Poor Gid” him yet.
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“Sacrifice” is so enticing in a story . .
These characters are really shaping up; becoming more and more juicy. Way cool.
………dhole
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oooooo…juicy. 🙂 Thanks Donna
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Very colorful and vivid, as usual, with loads of bells and whistles and surprises thrown in. I think Gid is the one to watch out for….wait, is he the third character? Stuart, you’re an awesome storyteller!
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Yes, Gid is next. And yeah…watch out for Gid. Thanks Damyanti. Hope you’re feeling better.
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So, I was feeling bad for Gid, but after reading the comments, I’m thinking he might be the biggest surprise of all. I love the switch from the sexy red-haired bartender to the grizzled Dig. Nice contrast.
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Thanks Barbara…it’s a wait and see process. Glad you enjoyed the switch. She might make a return, but NOT in this story. Same with Digger. This is not their story.
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I love the dark undertones in this
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Glad you’re enjoying it Jana. Right bastards, the lot of them.
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Well, the story is taking a darker turn. There is something a bit creepy going on here. As for the redheads, I can still see your obsession with hair here! Can’t wait to read part 3.
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Hi Muriel: yes, and it will get darker still. Hair is just one main way to describe, and I like redheads. 🙂 Thanks…wait for next Wednesday!!!
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Brilliant! Love the atmosphere of this tale. Long sending – that’s a good name for it.
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thanks Deniz. Glad you are enjoying it.
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I love the depth of your writing, the details , and the secrets withheld….
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I remember the domes were already there in the alternate piece of the first entry…So much for for feeling sorry for Gid…farm boys can be smarter than they look I guess….enjoyable.
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Rekha: I used the domes as the very last visual in the first Trailer and have wanted to use them since then. Yes, the domes are a major part of the future, and I like to tie things together. It is, after all, one shared world. Renaissance….where everyone has a secret. Thanks.
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Feels like a very real place with shifty characters. Feels like a western and a steampunk and sify rolled into one. Great writing. Can’t wait for more.
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Thanks Richard. I wasn’t going with one specific genre, so I’m glad you see the various influences. Kinda Steampunk, but there are other things built in.
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“The Barking Cat”?! Heh! =) I’m really enjoying the story, the characters, and the environment you have created. The alternate history/world and magical feel is great. I’m wondering if this “male sacrifice” is as dumb as they think he is? I can’t wait til next week’s part.
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Just because Gid is a farm ‘boy”, they are selling him short. Wait.
Thanks Rachel. As I’ve mentioned, I’ve taken the name from one of the stories. Homage and thanks to our writers.
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Freaky! I don’t even want to think of what might happen next! The fantasy and magic seemed to make it all creepier even. =P
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Thanks Samantha: well, still two more parts to go.
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I like the one-line teaser at the end, setting up the next POV (I hope). I wonder if Gid will make it out of this alive…
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I don’t think my comment posted. Anyway, I like the POV setup at the end of each piece (if that’s what that is). I fear for Gid, though…
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Hi Joshua: WP is acting up a bit today…don’t know why. Yes, the one line at the end of both posts are the set up for the next posting. If you looked at my week three prompts, I have it all kinda sorta spelled out. Thanks.
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