Jan7

Sonnet: Wishing You

Posted on January 7, 2012 by Stu

Wishing you were here does not make it so;

Extraordinary surprise, waiting

Holding onto unsaid words; what I know

Creates an inner need that needs sating.

Wishing you felt so exactly the same

Craving what has not been inside so long

It is unfair to you to force equal, no blame

Should rest on one whose spirit is so strong.

But, wishing all that I wish for can drive

A chasm that could not be crossed inside

Ceasing feelings that would die, not so thrive

Pulls me inward, keeping silent; I hide.

Oh, wishing you felt like I truly do

Wishing I the nerve to say I love you.

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Hajra on January 7, 2012 at 11:55 am said:

Told like a true lover indeed! 🙂

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- bornstoryteller on January 7, 2012 at 12:00 pm said:
  
  Thank you Hajra.
  
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thundergoes on January 7, 2012 at 12:19 pm said:

Impressive! I can’t write a sonnet to save my life, but I appreciate the form. Nice job!

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- bornstoryteller on January 7, 2012 at 5:09 pm said:
  
  Thank you. It’s really not that hard, once you do a few.
  
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cath on January 7, 2012 at 12:52 pm said:

Just beautiful. I have no other words.

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- bornstoryteller on January 7, 2012 at 5:10 pm said:
  
  I take that as the compliment it’s meant to be. Thanks Cathy
  
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daisy on January 7, 2012 at 1:44 pm said:

Yes just beautiful.

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- bornstoryteller on January 7, 2012 at 5:10 pm said:
  
  Thank you.
  
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Martha Orlando on January 7, 2012 at 4:12 pm said:

Love this poem, Stuart! Simply beautiful . . .
Blessings to you!

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- bornstoryteller on January 7, 2012 at 5:11 pm said:
  
  I feel them. Thanks, Martha.
  
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Roberta Budvietas on January 7, 2012 at 6:47 pm said:

You do have a way of expressing yourself

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- bornstoryteller on January 7, 2012 at 6:51 pm said:
  
  Thanks Roberta.
  
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Li @Flash Fiction on January 7, 2012 at 7:38 pm said:

There is no greater gift to give than one’s heart. “Beautiful” doesn’t do justice to it – but then words sometimes fail all of us.

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- bornstoryteller on January 7, 2012 at 7:50 pm said:
  
  I truly understand that, Li. Thank you, very much.
  
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Rachel on January 8, 2012 at 2:00 am said:

You have beautifully and poignantly captured the desperation of unrequited love. Good job! 🙂

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- bornstoryteller on January 8, 2012 at 9:51 am said:
  
  Thank you Rachel.
  
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MuMuGB on January 8, 2012 at 5:00 am said:

A beautiful poem. Some simple things might be hard to say…

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- bornstoryteller on January 8, 2012 at 9:52 am said:
  
  They shouldn’t have to be hard, but…thanks Muriel.
  
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Anna Tan on January 8, 2012 at 5:12 am said:

Sigh. ❤

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- bornstoryteller on January 8, 2012 at 9:52 am said:
  
  Yes…understand that sigh completely .
  
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Janettte Fuller on January 8, 2012 at 11:44 am said:

It is very hard to find the words to express love ~ You have done a beautiful job.

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- bornstoryteller on January 8, 2012 at 4:26 pm said:
  
  Janette: thank you. Sometimes it’s too easy to overdo it.
  
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PeggyLee Hanson on January 8, 2012 at 3:45 pm said:

Absolutely beautiful! I am familiar with your writing style; it’s one I often use when unable to form words into intelligible sentences when coming so deeply within the heart. I felt every emotion.

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- bornstoryteller on January 8, 2012 at 4:27 pm said:
  
  I’m glad it touched you so. Thank you, PeggyLee
  
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The Golden Eagle on January 8, 2012 at 6:02 pm said:

Wonderful poem! I love the way you describe the emotions.

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- bornstoryteller on January 8, 2012 at 6:03 pm said:
  
  Thanks GE. I’m so glad this has gotten such a response.
  
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Lynn Brown on January 8, 2012 at 9:21 pm said:

You certainly have a talent for writing Stuart! Thank you for sharing.

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- bornstoryteller on January 9, 2012 at 7:16 am said:
  
  You are most welcome. Thank you Lynn.
  
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Joy on January 10, 2012 at 8:01 am said:

painful and beautifully expressed

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- bornstoryteller on January 10, 2012 at 12:02 pm said:
  
  There is pain in fear. Thanks Joy.
  
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Lisa Kanarek on January 10, 2012 at 11:44 am said:

So well said. Really enjoyed this.

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- bornstoryteller on January 10, 2012 at 12:02 pm said:
  
  Thank you very much Lisa.
  
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