Mar24

Rusted Away

Posted on March 24, 2012 by Stu

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Encrusted, Rusted

Someone I should have trusted

Gave in, Caved in

Now price is being paid

Should have mistrusted

Just looked the other way

Really, the price to pay

For looking the other way

Encrusted, Rusted

Most times I should just leave

Held out, hoped out

Now price is being paid

Should have mistrusted

Not enough hours in the day

Too much not conveyed

Nothing left; so much to say

Encrusted, Rusted

Everything tumbling down

Fanned out, Maxed out

Now price is being paid

Should have mistrusted

Overwhelmed, feet of clay

Obligated, it does weigh

Obfuscate, betray

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karensdifferentcorners on March 24, 2012 at 12:29 pm said:

Good poem Stuart. Touches on many different areas of my life.

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- Stuart Nager on March 24, 2012 at 9:44 pm said:
  
  Thanks Karen. Hope you overcome those areas.
  
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Hajra on March 24, 2012 at 12:46 pm said:

Makes one think in a lot of ways…

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- Stuart Nager on March 24, 2012 at 9:44 pm said:
  
  Tried to make it that way, Hajra. Thanks.
  
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jill marie on March 24, 2012 at 12:46 pm said:

while I like the form or flow, I am not sure I really get the meaning in this piece. Did “you” trust someone you shouldn’t have, or not trust someone you should have? Did that person betray you? Maybe too cerebral for me.

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MuMuGB on March 24, 2012 at 1:15 pm said:

Relationships can be complicated and your poem conveys this perfectly!

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- Stuart Nager on March 24, 2012 at 9:43 pm said:
  
  Thanks Muriel. There are so many different types of relationships.
  
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Lisa Wields Words on March 24, 2012 at 3:38 pm said:

This sounds so painful, but I can relate. I tend to trust where I shouldn’t.

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- Stuart Nager on March 24, 2012 at 9:42 pm said:
  
  Just had the first two words running through my head..it all went from there. Thanks Lisa
  
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RAAckerman@Cerebrations.biz on March 24, 2012 at 4:36 pm said:

One can only hope and pray,
That now you’ve had your say,
That there’ll be no delay,
To the return of your smile and reparte!

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- Stuart Nager on March 24, 2012 at 9:42 pm said:
  
  Ah, there is a lot more I left out, but..it says what it needs to. Thanks Roy.
  
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Li @ Flash Fiction on March 24, 2012 at 6:11 pm said:

Lyrics? 🙂 I think we tend to beat ourselves up when we are betrayed, as though it is our fault. But while we may ignore or close our eyes to warning signs, in the end the responsibility lies solely with the one whose actions called the grief.

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- Stuart Nager on March 24, 2012 at 9:41 pm said:
  
  Yup..you got it. For the first time I had a rap style beat in my head while writing this; that’s why the rhyming and flow of the piece went this way. Good eye, Li.
  
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cathy jones tittle (@jonesbabie) on March 25, 2012 at 9:09 am said:

Read this twice and saw something different both times. Relationships sure have some twisted angles. I liked the rhythm of this one Stu.

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- Stuart Nager on March 25, 2012 at 9:36 am said:
  
  Thanks Cathy. I had a different “beat” when I wrote this from what I normally hear in my head.
  
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Judith Braffman-Miller on March 31, 2012 at 12:05 pm said:

Another great one–and one that I, unfortunately, can relate to!

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- Stuart Nager on March 31, 2012 at 7:01 pm said:
  
  Thank you Judith. Hope you enjoy what’s coming up in April
  
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pagemanuel on April 8, 2012 at 1:15 pm said:

Some lessons just need to be learnt the hard way. I guess it’s never too late…or so we hope. I really enjoyed this one Stuart!

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- Stuart Nager on April 8, 2012 at 7:53 pm said:
  
  Thank you Joy.
  
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