The Secret Acquiescence: #FridayFictioneers

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PHOTO PROMPT © Roger Bultot

The Secret Acquiescence

“Unfriendlies.”

“Copy that. Commence action.”

“Affirmative.”

The dome exploded, shards of glass rained. Zeta Team rappelled down.

Shots fired; shots returned. Unfriendlies down. No Zeta casualties.

Scanning the area, Zeta One signaled to advance. They reached their second objective:  a large steel door.

Detcord placed, explosives went off, door breached. Zeta Team cleaned out all resistance along the hallway.

Final objective: door to the prisoner.  Extra Detcord did the job.

Zeta One approached the objective. He had a white beard and hair, hat in hands. He looked at Zeta One expectantly.

“The country needs you, Uncle Sam,” Zeta One said.

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Author’s Note:

It’s #Friday Fictioneers prompt time, as always created and hosted by Rochelle Wisoff-Fields on her blog, Addicted To Purple.

The rules are simple if you’d like to do this:

    1. Use the photo on Addicted to Purple as your prompt (goes up on Wednesday).
    2. Write a 100 word story, complete with beginning, middle, and end.
    3. Make every word count.
    4. It is proper etiquette to give the contributor of the photo credit.
  1. Add the InLinkz button (below) so your readers can find the dozens of other bloggers who have taken up this challenge.

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42 responses »

  1. Your deliberately choppy sentences give the story great pace. It’s neat and fluent. Cleverest of all, you invoke an archetype – Uncle Sam – whose attitude to today’s situation can be imagined by every reader to suit their own taste.

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    • As I’ve mentioned, I am glad the pacing worked. I look at the idea of Uncle Sam as a strong, united front. We haven’t had that in a long time. Thanks, Penny.

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    • Thank you, Alicia. I’m glad a number of commenters mentioned the pacing. I realized as I got partway through this needed the staccato bursts of info. Long exposition is not part of quick and dirty.

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