PHOTO PROMPT © Ted Strutz
A Night Without
The lights drew them on.
From bars to clubs to private parties, the three had been on the go since sundown. The long night brought pleasure, debauchery, and fear. The three thrived through all of it.
Pre-dawn left the streets barren in front of them, wasteland behind them.
It had been a good night. They just wanted to make it last as long as they could. It was in their nature, and it was a shared revelry.
Still craving more, they searched for new pleasures. The lights attracted them. Then the laughter and music.
Their night would end, well sated.
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Author’s Notes: (Edited)
Hi. I was going for subtle, and I probably went way too far. Only a few picked up on the key words: “the long night brought pleasure, debauchary, and FEAR.”; the streets behind them were a “wasteland.”; their night would end with them being “sated.”
To me, I tried to say “Danger” without saying “Vampires.” Lesson learned: too subtle doesn’t work.
As to the title A Night Without, I went for the symbolism of Night. From Sparknotes:
God’s first act is to create light and dispel this darkness. Darkness and night therefore symbolize a world without God’s presence. In Night, Wiesel exploits this allusion. Night always occurs when suffering is worst, and its presence reflects Eliezer’s belief that he lives in a world without God.
So, A Night Without is a night without God. Probably should have just put the word in. Again, live and learn.
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Sounds like a night well spent! Now, if they do that every night… might be a problem, but if not, have at it!
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Well, a night well spent, for them. Thanks, Dale.
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Can’t decide if this is a good night out, or something more sinister, like vampires… Good story.
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Mwahahaha. It was a good night…for them. Thanks, Iain.
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Btw: you pretty much hit the nail on the head. It was there in the tabs I put on this for searched. Thanks
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I dunno, Stuart, this sounds like a night WITH!
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Roy, I thought this would be in your ballpark. Weisel’s “Night” should give you a clue (and no, it’s not Nazi’s).
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Dear Stu,
Sounds like a good time was had by all. Good friends make any night a good one. Well done.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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It seems everyone except Iain missed the word “fear”. Vampires.
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And so I did. Ah vampires. Oops.
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Sometiimes we have nights out that we never want to end – lovely story.
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Yes, if you’re a Vampire.
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Well well. Vampires. I totally missed it of course. I got hung up on the last sentence thinking, how could the night be sated? Very sneaky little tale.
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It wasn’t the night that was sated, they were sated. Alas, I was too subtle. If you care to, please read the edited “Author’s Note” just under the story. Thanks. I like being sneaky.
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This happens when people meet long lost friends and they know it’ll be long before they meet again. You captured that feeling very well.
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Thanks for commenting.
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The vampires went over my head. It seemed as if they would try every indulgence on the list. But there was a tone of something darker in this line that didn’t leave me alone, “Pre-dawn left the streets barren in front of them, wasteland behind them”.
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I’m glad you picked up on that. If you care to, please look above at the edited “Author’s Note”.
Thanks for commenting.
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I hope they don’t have work in the morning…
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Not really. If you care to, take a look at the above-edited Author’s Note. Thanks.
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Ah! I though maybe they were students. Same difference, some would say 🙂
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I hope they don’t have too far to get back before dawn. Subtle.
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Thanks, Sandra. If you care to, take a look at the edited Author’s note.
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Well, I caught the references to fear and wasteland, and wondered what particularly wicked pleasures they’d been ‘enjoying’, but vampires didn’t cross my mind – but then, I don’t read vampire fiction; I thought more along the lines of shapeshifting aliens (‘cos I read science fiction occasionally). I think, actually, you come close to making subtle work for you. A small reference to outsized canine teeth should do it…
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Thanks. You’re right. I just didn’t want to hit people over the head, but to realize something was not…right.
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Oh, the nightlife crowd how do they do it.
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I totally missed Vampires till I read your note. Maybe “searched for new pleasures” can become “searched for new victims”. That might give it more bite 😉
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Yeah, it needed something that wasn’t hit over the head. Thanks for the suggestion.
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You brought to mind nights like that, a long time ago, and walking a deserted street in the early morning light. Nice take.
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Thanks for reading
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It sounds as if they may have visited a few of the places in my story! Nicely done. They made me tired just reading about them.
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Thanks, Alicia. Will miss you on FF.
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I realized that something dystopian nightmare is going on. Didn’t get the vampire bit until the footnote.
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Thanks. Yeah, I see I needed one more sentence of semi-clarification. Something along the lines of “They wiped the remnants of blood off their lips as they advanced on their next meal.” or something like that.
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I must admit, I thought of other “pleasures” when I first read your story. When I read your notes at the end, it took on a whole different feel. I enjoyed both!
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Well, Vampires are usually thought of as sensual…mine don’t twinkle. Thanks, Jan.
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I did pick up on some of your clues, but since I’m not into the whole vampire craze, I didn’t realize exactly where you were taking us until the very end. I think this would perhaps be a good opening for a longer story that reveals this trio for what they are.
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Yup. It needed one more clarifying thing for a drabble; for a longer story, I agree with you.
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Thanks for the footnote. I hadn’t got the ‘vampire’ bit, but then I don’t usually read about vampires.
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It was more in the atmosphere. Thanks for commenting.
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Loved the atmospheric feel to this piece.
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Thank you, Lisa
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